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Beth Camp's avatar

Yes, this story drew me right in . . . although, like Natalie (in the comment below), I was a little confused about whose POV the story is being told from. Lily was an engaging character, and I wanted to learn more of here, but Aurora immediately took center stage, and her relationship with the house makes me want to turn the page! I hope you write more!

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Natalie Aguirre's avatar

I think this is a cool story that sucked me in right away. I think you should continue it. My only suggestion would be to tell it from Aurora's POV from the start, like starting the scene with Lily coming into her room. Maybe Lily could act shocked at being asked to smile instead of getting into her internal thoughts.

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